Part 2 is up! Yay YouTube! Yay Comedy!

12 01 2009

Part 2 is up. Here it is. Please check it out and the other videos. Comment. All that fun stuff.

I really like this one. It’s paced well and is a good follow up. The thing I like the best, however, is that it played better than it did in my head. The delivery was better, but the adlibbing was great. The actor who voiced Le Shoc, Charles Hubbell, improved on it.

This is exactly how things should go when dealing with actors. When I was learning screenwriting and directing a lot of people, including myself, wanted to tell the actors how lines should be read. “Don’t say it like that, say it like this.” The pull to do that is so strong because you wrote it (or you’re directing it), and it’s your baby and you know how it’s supposed to go. But you can’t. You have to stop yourself. It’s not your job; it’s theirs.

The actor’s job is to give you what you want, but also to give the character life, and that means letting him/her do their job. If they don’t deliver the line right, then tell them. You want it more sarcastic. More dire. More passion. Dryer. Whatever. Tell them, but don’t do it for them.

One, it’s rude.

Two, it bites you in the ass. Sure, they’ll deliver the line the way you want it, but they’ll be stiffled from offering new takes that could benefit the characters in ways you’d love but have never dreamed of. You turn them into acting zombies, and that’s not cool.

Let them do their job. You concentrate on doing yours. Write well.





The most important thing a writer can do is write an amazing post title

8 09 2008

I’ve finally started a writing blog. To all my fans out there, and they are legion, there will be much rejoicing. Please do subscribe.

Check out the Videos section for a new TVTV sketch I wrote. My name’s in the credits and everything. I’m very proud.

In fact, here it is.

Transylvania TV is a great group of guys, and the show really deserves some play.

Writing sketches, or anything that gets shot for the screen, is an interesting experience in “low man on the totem pole” existance. When you write an article, it gets edited, but no one really changes it. That’s not kosher. When you write a book, your editor rips it apart and tells you to change a bunch of stuff. But in the end it’s you who has the final say. They can’t make changes for you. It’s not kosher.

But when you write for TV or movies, you don’t have anywhere near the last say. It goes through a hundred changes. And even on a little internet clip like this, it goes through changes. For instance, my version had “butt rape” but that was replaced with “ass rape” which is certainly less funny. But I stand by it as a funny sketch. You should always stand by your work. That’s tip #1.

Why am I writing scripts about butt rape? Well, I guess you have to know TVTV, but long story short, it came out of a writers meeting. One of the writers, who’s very good, submitted a script with a surprising amount of rape in it, and although the script was funny, the discussion was even better. It had to become a sketch.